Open Studio 10/29/2012 In the previous issue of Rapid City...

Issue 2 is getting ready to the printer, but I forgot to write that "last issue..." blurb. So here goes.

"Last issue... Brian, a young man who

Frustrated with his...

Taking the name Kinetic, a young man...

No, I should make it past tense

Last issue... Brian was frustrated... (too passive)

Brian struggled to start a life as a superhero, ultimately choosing the name "Kinetic". (that is better) Meanwhile, Law enforcement agents froze Maxwell Murder's bank accounts, forcing him into ( into what? desperation?)

Meanwhile, frozen bank accounts force Maxwell Murder into a corner. (nope. Not right.)

Meanwhile, frozen bank accounts leave Maxwell Murder in a desperate situation. (Ok, I think that works. Now let's put them together.)

Brian struggled to start a life as a superhero, ultimately choosing the name "Kinetic". Meanwhile, frozen bank accounts leave Maxwell Murder in a desperate situation.

I think that'll do it. -Josh

How about:

Brian won his first superhero bout-with himself-by choosing his name 'Kinetic'.  Maxwell Murder, on the other hand, lost his bout with an ATM as he learned his account had been frozen...making the killer desperate....