Issue #7

The script for the seventh issue of the superhero comic book, Rapid City has now been posted. Read and discuss it here.

Panel 4 Shot from approximately the passenger side door, looking past Hourglass back at Kinetic. He is still looking serious and concerned. Hourglass is so far in the foreground, that we can't actually see her. She is part of the frame. We should see either her shoulders, her hands, or some of her face. If her face, it is in shadow and she is looking down. Whatever we can see of her, she is shaking.

KINETIC

Are you ok?

HOURGLASS

Y-yes.

Panel 5 Now we see what Kinetic has been looking at. We see Hourglass from Kinetic's POV. She is looking back at him and there are tears rolling out of her eyes and down over her mask. She is reaching up to wipe them away.

HOURGLASS

I'm ok. I'll be fine.

HOURGLASS

Don't look.

Panel 6 Shot from outside Kinetic's window. He is looking away from Hourglass and up at the house. Behind him, we can see her lifting her mask just enough to wipe her eyes on the back of her glove.

Panel 7 Shot from a similar angle, but closing in on Hourglass. She is straightening her mask.

HOURGLASS

Ok, I'm ready.

In this issue, Kinetic and Hourglass's pursuit of a killer leads them to the doorstep of Red Lion, the living embodiment of destruction. Tensions mount, loyalties are tested, and the real identity of the victim is revealed.

And now, Red Lion

Red Lion is a character form the original Rapid City comics I was working on a few years ago.  I needed a character in a certain time and place for this new story and he fit the bill perfectly. I like seeing how characters change depending on their settings.

Because each of the stories represent different points in my life, the symbolic value of the characters changes completely.

Without warning, he suddenly became a major player in this current story arc. I realized that I did not have a character sheet written up, so I took a few minutes and put one together. Enjoy.

Issue #6

The script for the sixth issue of the superhero comic book, Rapid City has now been posted. Read and discuss it here.

Panel 1 Hourglass is still talking, but now we see Kinetic and Justin's reactions to her story. They are both concerned.

HOURGLASS The man was gone and so was the girl. I could have stopped the whole thing, but I screwed up. Her death is on my head.

KINETIC Hey, you did the best you could at that moment. It's ok to be scared.

Panel 2 Kinetic keeps talking. He is gesturing to his own head.

KINETIC No one can be expected to know how to deal with....with death like that. I can't imagine how that must mess with you up here.

Panel 3 Hourglass looks back at him with a look resembling pity.

This issue is the second part of the Hourglass story arc. Kinetic and Hourglass are getting closer to finding a killer, who is getting closer to finding them.

Back to work

I spent the last week in Florida with my family.And the week before that getting ready for the trip. We did Family Christmas while there, so that week was spent making and shipping gifts. It was exhausting and stressful to scramble all of that stuff together, but it was well worth it to see the results. My girlfriend, Bekah, and I each got dedicated writing notebooks. So, while my brother fished for sheepshead in the intracoastal waterway, I was able to sit and write for a little while. I also managed to punch a few keys on the two flights on the way down. All told, though, this was NOT a productive fortnight.

Now that I am back in my routine, though, I think I know what I need to do. I have a few scenes to re-work, but the characters seem to be moving into position.

There is a confrontation at the climax of issue two, about which I have not done enough thinking. Ideologically it makes sense. The characters are in conflict with eachother. One represents a subject about which the other is in deep denial, so it makes sense for her to respond with strong emotions.... which in superhero terms means FIGHT! I just have not paced out the escalation of that confrontation.

Once that is done, I can put this issue to bed.

I just hope I don't go too far over my page count. It is dense as it is and I would hate to have to chop things or move them around.

It occurs to me now that if I do need to cut some pages, I can set up that fight, and leave the pay-off for the next issue. That has the added benefit of putting that fight in what will be the last issue of this story arc.

And, hopefully that will mean that the third act will wrap itself up with minimal coaxing and I will be able to get back on deadline for next month.

As always, keep up on my blog here. And read my Rapid City scripts here.